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A Quickened Death

A Quickened Death
PUBLISHED wFOR OPENLINK NIGHT FOR
dVERSEPOETS THIS TUESDAY
NIGHT IN JUNE!
I don’t know anything
Most certainly ~ nothing!
Feelings drown out my
day
Thrown down & tossed
out
Ragged myths of farewell
bliss
How to step up and fight

Carry on
Didn’t you hear me?
Hours of the day
mount
Sullen moments
belie
My solemn
dread
the calm before a storm
I don’t know anything
Most certainly ~ nothing!
Uncertain future plays over
again
and
again
Too much to control with too much
waste
  Fast forward as I’m in a
rush
Meaning escapes me ~ I place my
 hope
in a quickened death
Carry on
Didn’t you hear me?
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14 thoughts on “A Quickened Death”

  1. Joe ~ thank you for such a high compliment! ~sorry it was your first read this morning! I am hopeful & prayerful too~ always go back to 'never give up' through life! There is always the chance of miracles! Thank you again for taking time to leave feedback as it is greatly appreciated! Have a good day today Joe!

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  2. My first poem as I awake today is such a powerful one, and affecting. I can relate to such thoughts as asking for death to hurry up and get it over with because life has become too much to near. Written about them myself. But not like this.

    Extremely moving, Joanie!

    ~ j

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  3. Glad you enjoyed this write! I know it is very dark ~ no fever or hallucinatory actions ~ however the sense if urgency is certainly here! A dear friend of mine faces vascular surgery on both of her legs & may loose a foot . . . just hard to face possibilities she might not come through the surgery! I am hopeful & prayerful ~ looking for a miracle really ~ resurrection!

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  4. Hey Ed thanks my dear friend ~ I'm pleased that you think I'm improving ~ goes back to the more you write the better you should get! 🙂 hoping that's true! Glad you pointed out a couple of my lines – I agree the lines work better with fewer! THANK YOU ~ I'll make some edits ~ again you are kind to be a mentor!

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  5. Thanks so much Louise for taking time to read & comment! I know it is a difficult subject which I normally do not write as a theme! Thanks for your feedback ~ always appreciated! Loved reading your writing earlier tonight! THANKS ~

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  6. when I first read this I thought, wow, she's getting better, and this is an improvement over your previous poems. It takes a little pondering, a few extra readings, to get the full meaning, and that's a good thing. I have no nits to pick. Of course I don't necessarily agree with fast forward. And maybe you could say the calm before the storm, instead of like the calm before the storm, but overall a really good poem. Congratulations.

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  7. Oh, this is powerful…captures well how hard it is to let go of those negative voices that we all have within ourselves…they can be very persuasive…..very strong poem, Joan!

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